Writing

Descriptive Writing

__Student Targets: __

We are learning to:


 * Experiment with vocabulary to achieve an intended effect
 * Attempt more complex sentences
 * Use similes and alliteration to make our writing more exciting

We have been busy writing descriptively... sometimes we use pictures and sometimes we use our own experiences:

Ava wrote:

Growling, the fierce hungry lion is showing off his sharp, straight, swordy teeth. Fluffy, furry mane falling like refreshing rain on me.

Kion wrote:

Growling the fierce lion is hungry and its teeth are curvy, sharp like a knife sword. Falling golden mane is falling down like a flat tyre.

Lincoln wrote:

Mystical magical speedful dragon named Zog. Flying in the stars having so much fun is our little dragon Zog.

Kasey wrote:

// (While walking in the bush at Pukekmokemoke, Mr Hopa showed us the glow-worms) //

Magic glow-worms shining, flashing, flickering in the sky like twinkly stars in the night.

Emma wrote:

Glow-worms, gleaming, glistening, beautiful on the leaves and on the dirt.

Leah wrote:

//(We studied native birds and this is our descriptive writing about the kea)//

Beautiful, fluffy, soft feathers are red, yellow and grey. Scary beak when it nips you, is dull, hard and sharp and curved like a tree and sharp like a blade.

Alex wrote:

Growling, hungry lion shows his pointy, sharp, huge teeth. Fluffy, furry golden mane is falling down like leaves from a tree.

Diego wrote:

Glowing brightly, shining magically, glistening, gleaming, glow-worms flashing like twinkly stars in the night.

Bianca wrote:

Pointy small beak is scary and sharp. Sharp and spikey feet and claws helps the kea to catch food.

Phoebe wrote:

Growling the fierce lion is showing his sharp, pointy teeth. Fluffy, golden, cute lion's mane looks like a feather falling off a bird.

Recount Writing

__**STUDENT TARGETS:**__ I am able to:
 * Write about personal experiences
 * Use editing skills to improve the message, correct punctuation and spelling

__**Personal Writing**__: Each Monday morning we use the computer to do our personal writing. We have devised a system which allows the children to use the same methods of editing their work on the computer as they use in their story books. This is an example of two entries made by one child.

//When I edit my work I use red  letters and when Mrs Averill edits my work she uses <span style="color: #0000ff; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">blue <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">. //

<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">7.3.2011 YesYesterday my uncle came to my house and we played football inside. I done did heaps of goals and I won the game. I got a chocolate because I won the game and we watched life. I t was about comodo komodo dragons. T he comodo komodo dragons are the most venuomes venomous animal in the world. I t can kill any thing anything in the world. We got bubble gum.