Descriptive+Writing

Descriptive Writing

__Student Targets: __ We are learning to: We have been busy writing descriptively... sometimes we use pictures and sometimes we use our own experiences: Ava wrote: Growling, the fierce hungry lion is showing off his sharp, straight, swordy teeth. Fluffy, furry mane falling like refreshing rain on me. Kion wrote: Growling the fierce lion is hungry and its teeth are curvy, sharp like a knife sword. Falling golden mane is falling down like a flat tyre. Lincoln wrote: Mystical magical speedful dragon named Zog. Flying in the stars having so much fun is our little dragon Zog. Kasey wrote: // (While walking in the bush at Pukekmokemoke, Mr Hopa showed us the glow-worms) // Magic glow-worms shining, flashing, flickering in the sky like twinkly stars in the night. Emma wrote: Glow-worms, gleaming, glistening, beautiful on the leaves and on the dirt. Leah wrote: //(We studied native birds and this is our descriptive writing about the kea)// Beautiful, fluffy, soft feathers are red, yellow and grey. Scary beak when it nips you, is dull, hard and sharp and curved like a tree and sharp like a blade. Alex wrote: Growling, hungry lion shows his pointy, sharp, huge teeth. Fluffy, furry golden mane is falling down like leaves from a tree. Diego wrote: Glowing brightly, shining magically, glistening, gleaming, glow-worms flashing like twinkly stars in the night. Bianca wrote: Pointy small beak is scary and sharp. Sharp and spikey feet and claws helps the kea to catch food. Phoebe wrote: Growling the fierce lion is showing his sharp, pointy teeth. Fluffy, golden, cute lion's mane looks like a feather falling off a bird.
 * Experiment with vocabulary to achieve an intended effect
 * Attempt more complex sentences
 * Use similes and alliteration to make our writing more exciting